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Reviews for ARAAT2: Eclipse - Part 1

By : Breech_Loader

From ANON - RAW19 on January 24, 2006
...then Shadow ran into the room looking for his son, only to find him strangling his guard; crushing the breath of life out of him. Eclipse looked up and said, "when we find bad breath, we kill it."

another excellent chapter my friend. this remains my favorite sonic series. update soon!
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From AntwerpsRule on January 22, 2006
hmmmmmmm........
Well then...hasn't this gotten interesting. I feel no pity for whomever gets in Shadow's way. So you finially decided to make your readers take the dark side of this seriously, I'm starting to wonder if Shadow will EVER get the chance to propose to Amy.
Amy punched a doctor in the face, I think you let them off easy. All I want to know now is since when does Eggman sell his robots? Then again, He didn't exactly say it himself, so that might not be the case. Before I forget, THANK YOU for not making Amy pathetic about fighting back. Granted that under that kind of stress she might have been able to go farther, but then she might have been killed, which would suck... I shouldn't have even said anything...oh well, deleting it would take away the point
As usual, great work from the two of you.
Fan art? hmmmmmm.....since you encourage...definatly going to think about now...
Respectfully yours,
AntwerpsRule

Before I forget Harley; apology accepted, even though I personally took no offence...dagnosed with Attention Deficite Disorder around year nine. Very brave of you to share your own condition...thanks...seriously
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From Xtra on January 22, 2006
This is getting really good. I hope Shadow finds Eclipse and brings him back alive, though I don't think Eggman should die. Otherwise, Sonic would have nothing to do.

Anywys, can you tell us where the fan art is located?
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From ANON - The DarkChao on January 21, 2006
Aaaand I feel bad for eggman....and amy and shadow heh.. lovely chapter that starts introducing us to the Darker more disturbing side of the fanfic and what a chapter it was.
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From ANON - molly on January 20, 2006
ok look i knwo somthign that makes me smarterer i knwo what a fortnight is: a fortnight is two weeks ^_^
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From ANON - A fan of Sonic on January 20, 2006
*Sigh* Blinbd rage always make people do stupid things, and make them fail to realize something...

You clearly wrote that the robots were a type that Eggman sold. Meaning anyone could have bought the robots. My idea about it is GUN, but well, you're the author.

But I suppose Eggman can tell to who the last shipment of robots was sent...

Keep up the good work.
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From ANON - N/A on January 20, 2006
Excellantly well done, though the lack of any indepth explenation as to Sonic and Rouge's breakup irks, and Tails seems to be losing his innocence, though considering the passage of time I'd say that's acceptable.

As a minor idea, as a note for uture armoury options for Shadow, if it were me, I'd take a leaf out the book of Madness, and go with a pair of Mac-10's. Other than that, your grasp of the characters, the situation, and the general feel remains absolute, and inspiring.

It's amazing how you can repeatedly butcher the canon of Sonic, while still making it *feel* exactly the same. Maybe because it's all so plausible. Since this is Shadow, I imagine he's considerably stronger than humans and can stand to carry so much ordnance on his person, but also have to ask: Why exactly has the colour of his Chaos Control changed?

As a final plea: Don't forgot Shadow's abilities besides the guns? And also, does he have any previous experiance with firearms?

If not, then that's a serious handicap, recoil surprises a lot of people, and accuracy without training is harder than people think.
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From ANON - Koey Heades on January 20, 2006
Greatly sad chap. YOH, don't you think thats a dit much for shad to weaponry. Sonic Team F@#$%^ by doing that, so what make you think you can pull it off. Otherwise Greatly sad chap.
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From ANON - Kamirine on January 20, 2006
Too lazy to log in, sorry. ^_^*

Another great chapter, I really like the story! Oh, and fanart...I wanna draw fanart. ::Evil Laughter Insues:: Just let me pick my favorite scene...
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From ANON - Bob the Barbarian on January 19, 2006
Sonic's a psyco, befitting. Amy went through labor for ten hours, torture fit for hell, and nowhere else. Robotnik's a fur perv, that was nothing but obvious, (it gets lonely with nothin' but bots). Rouge and Amy are on talking terms, far from expected. And the government is spying on people, looking for the next big gun (in this case, Eclipse), instead of trying the to end stavation and poverty. Everything seems in order, just one question, how old is everyone supposed to be? Anywho, I'll probably never know,(since you never answer any of my reviews, and the chances of you doin' so now are slim-to-none,) so good story so far, update soon.
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From ANON - RAW19 on January 19, 2006
whew! it took me awhile, but i'm finally on the bandwagon!!

*rockets explode*

"lets get it started, huh! lets get it started in here! lets get it started, uh! lets get it started in here, we cuckoo, uh huh, we cuckoo, in here! we cuckoo, uh huh, we cuckoo in here!"

*ahem* first off things seem pretty well so far. i really liked the subtle jokes with shadow, knuckles, and tails. (giant robot, ha!) you have an iteresting plot with a mysterious third party and that's great. shadows kid has powers and thats cool. sonics problem can quickly grow into something larger, and we all wonder what happened with rouge, i like that. you've set everything up great, and i look forward to the next chapter. i noticed your warning about things getting graphic, and tell you that while i do enjoy saying "you're sick" i usually don't mean it. if the story is good, then sickness means nothing!

update soon!
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From ANON - Rand^^ on January 18, 2006
Wow, Sonic, a cuter didn't see that one comeing. But it does fit with his emotional state. Any way I eagerly await chapter four.

Rand^^,

ps. Will Eclipse stay a baby all through the fic?
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From KamirineGoddess on January 18, 2006
Aw damn, I envy your talent. LMAO.

It's amazing: I don't really like the pairing, but I'm so addicted to your story that I can't possibly stop reading it now. The first one was fantastic, to say the least. And this one as a great start! Just don't kill Amy or Shadow please--that would totally make me have to come hunt you down with my Tails Doll.

::tickles:: The baby is just adorable! Awww. ::Coos at it:: Though I do hope Sonic will be *okay* by the end of all of this. That little guy is beginning to scare me. I feel bad for him, even if he was a jerk the first story--at least give him a semi happy ending somehow. And Tails was right on the money. So sweet and loyal, he would totally stick by Sonic.

Update soon: impatience is a witch with a 'b' and waiting sucks just as bad. Oh! That was nice fan art by the way to the artist. Very pretty!
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From ANON - Anon on January 18, 2006
For the love of all things Sega Sonic, get over the amazing OOC Mary Sue Amy. You're embrassing yourself. I don't like ShadowAmy so your story will suck reguardless. Not because you can't write because I actually favor that weird Tails story--very interesting and well written--but this pairing has just never suited my taste. Though I will say: I hope you are going somewhere more interesting than "the baby is somehow very important and has special powers so everyone and their momma wants it" or at the very least, make it more interesting than the million times it's been done in this and other fan based stories. Because I would like to think you're more creative than that. Like being that key word.
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From ANON - Skittle Sama on January 17, 2006
You should really check your e-mail more often, Harley. =D
http://www.skittlesama.com/Ura18/Illust/RoseThorn.jpg
("A Rose and a Thorn": Chapter One Dialogue)

I loved your 'Rose and Thorn' series so much that I absolutely had to draw it a scene from the first one.
You give the characters such a lifelike quality. A quality that helps the readers relate to them in one way or another through their everyday lives. Between Shadow and Amy finding something in one another that brought them together and gave them a family- or Sonic's recent depressive nature.

It truly goes to show that even the truest of heroes have their demons, too. I can't wait for the next chapter of the sequel.

From on Shadow/Amy fan to another-
-Skittle Sama
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