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Reviews for Tomb Raider: The Fat Man Chronicles

By : MorbidFantasy
  • From HunterOpera on August 22, 2013
    Wow... you always give me something to shoot for, quality-wise. I loved how things are going all throughout Assignment One.

    The Beginning and a New Car were the very models of invading someone's privacy and safety and undermining everything Lara needs to recover. We've established already that her home is where she goes to recuperate, and now whatever space she had had been utterly stripped of her, and they've let her know this now that there's nothing she can do about it. Kitty's treatment of Lara adds spice to what's already pretty fantastic, leading into Young Love.

    And Young Love is one of my favorite chapters so far. I love everything that happened here - I remember being a little concerned with some minor details when you were workshopping this on the forums, but you completely dashed every last complaint I might have had. This was perfect, from Lara's humiliation and abuse and her reaction to it, to the giggling teenagers not knowing or caring who they're using, to Kitty's demented sadistic glee all the way to the airport. Freaking great.

    Airtime Interlude is right up there, too... from Lara's nightmare to her snide remarks to Gordo and Fernando, Miss Croft is clearly doing her level best to hold onto the person she believes herself to be. The pride she takes in what small victories she had available to her really mark just how far she's falling; basing the strength of her personality on trivial things is a great way to highlight what matters to her and how far she's being pushed. Gordo and Fernando's responses are equally great.

    Arrival is also a hell of a lot of fun, and does a wonderful job of setting up whatever's to follow. I love how envious Dr. Hanson is of Lara and the successes she's had, while still being dependent upon her. I love everything about this character - a small time professional blaming his failing on Lara, who in many ways has made herself more than human. I also love the way he casually lusts after her while explaining his actions towards her away to himself. He's believably horrible and kind of pathetic, and his use of her is all the hotter because of it.

    Great series of chapters, man. Can't wait for more.
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  • From VFSNAKE on August 21, 2013
    Nice! Laura is going commando now. Won't be long before her client decides to get his freak on with her. LOL!
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  • From ANON - Anon on August 20, 2013
    she can't climax - the device? don't forget consistency of narrative. or... remove it.
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  • From VFSNAKE on July 04, 2013
    NIce! Love how that went down. Keep it up!
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  • From ANON - Anon on May 13, 2013
    make the whole thing - ALLL OFF IT! - a dream sequence for the fat fuck. No need to kill him. THIS WOULD HURT MORE.
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  • From ANON - SailorNemesis on May 09, 2013
    Always a pleasant surprise to see you back. Hoping for some serious milking soon!
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  • From VFSNAKE on May 08, 2013
    Nice! Laura got tricked and dominated. LOL!
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  • From VFSNAKE on November 29, 2012
    Nice! Lara is in sexual hell. Love it!
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  • From HunterOpera on November 28, 2012
    Ye Gods, man. That was goddamn brilliant.

    I'm doing a more in-depth analysis over on yonder forums, cuz that? That was fucking stunning.
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  • From VFSNAKE on November 23, 2012
    YAY! You updated. A little disturbing, but nothing I can't ignore.
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  • From HunterOpera on November 21, 2012
    Glad to see you're still writing this - I was getting worried about it, honestly, as this story is one of the things that got me writing here in the first place. Your grasp of psychology and narrative is awesome, and the story you're presenting here is entirely believable in the framework of the mythos. I love it.

    So much of what you've written here has just been stunning, overall, and touched upon the darker aspects of the series' potential. You have a way with words, sir, that makes reading your writering an utter delight and I wish we saw your work a little more often because of it.

    And as someone I've taken a lot of inspiration from; hey, man, welcome back.
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  • From ninesenshi on March 27, 2011
    Nice to see more chaps (16+17). Good stuff. I really enjoy the complete domination of Lara and her training into a perfect sex slave while still remaining angry and obstinate. The case is very sexy. I usually do not enjoy such elaborate bondage where the hardware seems to become more important then the sex, but in this case you described it well while remaining very visceral about it which makes the whole thing very sexy. Again, the complete control over Lara, turning her own physical prowess towards making her a better slave is great. For anyone who says the tech is comic-booky, Lara lives in that sort of world. Hope to see more. Keep her in ever increasing bondage, do not be tempted to let her escape. We read to see her dominated.
    SailorNemesis
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  • From VFSNAKE on March 23, 2011
    Damn!
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  • From VFSNAKE on March 22, 2011
    Nice! Hot stuff.
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  • From xellos49698 on January 27, 2011
    Reviewing a story like this isn't easy as it's has its ups and downs.

    I think you went just a little too far with Lara's last 'Cat' encounter. Gordo's forcing Lara to drink sperm like went too far towards breaking her.

    However, I do like the humiliation factor you got going here.

    To be honest, the first couple of chapters were the best; I especially liked how Gordo's captured Lara.

    It would be nice to see Lara going on a new mission of some kind. Mr. Everest could make the request and Gordo could provide Lara her gear.)

    Here a brief plot outline....

    Mr. Everest promises Lara her freedom if she can steal, _________ artifact. Gordo is sent with Lara to assist her.

    An outfit composed of Body Paint, which is not water /sweat proof. And black leather accessories. (Belt, gloves, boots)

    A public plane ride to get to the location, with Gordo coming along for the ride with plenty of toys.

    Gordo gets to set up a reward and punishment for Lara success or failure during her mission.

    Mr. Everest tipping off the guards that Lara is attempting to steal the item.

    Lara is captured or attempt to escape a trap but can’t with Gordo’s help.

    Gordo helps Lara escape, in return for whatever he wants.

    Of course, this is just a suggestion. It's your story and you can write it any way you like.
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