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Reviews for ARAAT3: The Forbidden Experiment

By : Breech_Loader

From ANON - BZLF on September 03, 2006
Thanks again for the comments at the start of the chaptor.
I gotta say, you two really know how to write a sex scene.
It really had some length to it, beginning to end.
I can't wait to find out whats coming next chaptor, and knowing what you two did to Shadow, its going to be gruesome. Excellent.
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From AntwerpsRule on September 03, 2006
Heh, dissipear for awhile and everything changes. Piece by peice everything you used to know shifts just enough to remind you just how unsure you are about everything. Life is a truly absurd thing, on a good day.
I notice this turned into something...well odd. We get to see Espio and Mirage then out of the blue we see that Ashura doesn't waste a lot of time.
I'm not going to say much about privious chapters, simply because I honestly don't feel like it right now, except for your decision of making Tails gay. Of course he could be, he's about around that age where some people question that in themselves.
I can't say much about your Espio/Mirage scenes, except I recall blinking alot. I'm convinced that Espio is not a virgin, he semes too experienced, then again, he's another character who doesn't consider safe sex so mabey he's just easily wrapped up in the need to explore. I'm not saying that their scenes are whats odd about this, just the execution is. I'm sorry, but they have deja-vu written allover them. I can't help but be reminded of Breech and James. Mabey thats why this feels odd. Then again, it was in a way inevitable. How much time did you two put into them?
Damn, Espio know how to use his tongue...
anyway, I'm tired, which means I really should stop.
Oh, almost forgot, great work, even if I'm a bit irritated about how little of Eclipse we get to see. Wasn't Shadow and Amy the origional focus of this fic?
Respectfully yours;
AntwerpsRule
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From ANON - BZLF on August 29, 2006
Ah.. If that baby even survives, what kind of powers will it have? And while we are on the note of babys, what about Eclipse? Will the time at GUNs HQ cuase him to change in any way that might aid in stoping Ashura, or perhaps help him in whatever plans he has? Since Shadow, as an Experiment, can go Super with the seven Chaos Emeralds, can Mirage and Ashura as well? Or will they gain some sort of stronger control over their own Chaos Powers?? Perhaps nothing will change at all?

And what of Amy? Will Ashura capture her to cuase Shadow more grief? Will Ashura capture Ecplise just to cuase trouble for his parents? What part will Sonic play in all of this?? Will he die fighting? And couldn't Ashura be taken down by a Dart like Sonic was at GUNs HQ?? Also, will Sonic somehow tap into his Hyper form when/if he fights Ashura?? Could Shadow, also, have a Hyper form? Perhaps.. Now I've thought of something;What about Metal Sonic? As a Machine, would his mind work as a living, breathing creatures, such as Shadows? Could Metal Sonic, or even Metal Shadow/Tails/Knuckles/E-123 Omega beable to stand against Ashura before he gets the Seven Chaos Emeralds?? What about afterwards, if Ashura either does or does not have a Super form??
Well, I'd say thats enough questions for now. An excellent chaptor. Good job.
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From ANON - CrazyIvan(notloggedin) on August 27, 2006
Ahalrighty then, super good, sort of...
Um, yeah...
Well you see we may have a little problem here. Four plus four equals eight, but two peas in a pod can't beat the shit out of each other....
Now about the chapters(10 and 11).
Well, it's alright, a little less constipation a little more action.... Riiight...
Okay then, S'all right, no errors, good formating etc etc, you need more waffles though.
This is CrazyIvan, signing off for now...
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From ANON - Disaster Master on August 27, 2006
Oh no! Rouge's pregnant!? Chapter 11 score= 4 out of 5 The baby is obviously Sonic's. This fic DOES put Hollywood to shame as Lizzie said. I mean, really, what the fuck is up with that "Snakes on a Plane" shit!? Hollywood is running out of ideas.
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From ANON - PowerJump on August 25, 2006
A very great story.
prehaps the greastest series in the sonic section...no...
The BEST SERIES in the whole GAME section sounds more like it....
but I will admit....
I agree with Lizzie, as far as Espio and Mirage's concern you sure are spending a whole lot of time on them. you've kinda forgotten about the main cast ya?

also you keep claiming Ashura as megamonical and insane but so far I havent really seen him do anything to make those names seem true.....unless your definition for insane is much different than mine....

but mostly all I've seen is Espio and mirage with thier story, I'd really like for you too get us up-to-date on the other characters and such

With that I'm outta here

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From ANON - winraven on August 23, 2006
i love your story, all 46 chapters so far. I cant really point out anything that could be improved upon. i cnt wiat for your next chapter to come out i have saved all of them so far to my hard drive
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From ANON - Lizzie on August 22, 2006
Wow! A friend of mine reccommended this story to me, and I'm glad she finally convinced me to read it! Although it took me about a month to read from the first one to the current installment, it was totally worth it! At the moment of reading the first few chapters of the first one, I was totally addicted! You made the story very believeable, the relationships, the reactions of the characters, everything! There were a few things I didn't like, and things that were VERY illogical. Like Sonic for instance, Sonic can be short-tempered, but I seriously doubt that he would go overboard and rape Amy. Other than that, the story went extremely great!

Now for the second one; totally kicked ass! I totally LOVED the baby! *Snuggles Eclipse* AW! HOW CUTE! Yet again, everything was believeable. The second one was really tragic, with Shadow tortured and tested on. It really made me shed some tears. It was really romantic when Amy came to Shadow's aid. Also, you did a very stupendous job in actually taking the time to make a backround for Amy, as not many people do. And it was great to see Sonic get along with Amy, after the whole 'flower shop incident.' Another factor that had me on the edge of my seat was Shadow's hallucination, you really had me thinking that he actually killed Amy. Even with all of the good factors, I didn't like what you did with Sonic. Sonic would never be a cutter, this too was very illogical. From what I can see, you seem to have an extreme dislike of Sonic.

Now for the third; so far, I haven't had much interest in it. I think you've been focusing a little too much on Espio and Mirage. You've made their relationship very intriging, but you've put a little too many chapters on them. It's starting to get a little (I'd hate to say this..) repetitive and boring to read.

Ok, I need to get going. So overall, the "A Rose and a Thorn" series is definitely one of the best Sonic fanfics ever made! Actually, this story is one of the best stories ever! It puts Hollywood to shame. I'm looking forward to the next installment! Bye-bye!
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From ANON - RAW19 on August 22, 2006
i highly enjoyed these latest updates. and as for the knuckles/mirage thing, i would of been fine with it.
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From ANON - Disaster Master on August 21, 2006
Regarding the kissing problem... Yes, people turn their heads slightly when they kiss, and they do look like they're trying to 'eat each others faces.' But having a bigass horn right in the middle of your face doesn't make it easy to kiss, even if he turns his head. If his horn was on his forehead, then it would be reasonable. But his horn is right in the MIDDLE of his face. Chapter 10 score= 3.5 out of 5. Btw funkman, I'm controversial all right, but I'm no idiot. -hits funkman with sledge hammer- I warned you! Don't fuck with me!
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From ANON - BZLF on August 21, 2006
Mirage+Knuckles? Eww.
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From ANON - funkman on August 19, 2006
Seeing a Knuckles/Mirage pairing would've been quite interesting. Espio/Mirage grabs your attention too. Don't listen to dm, he's a controversial idiot. There hasn't been a 'head-spinning' event yet, but knowing you guys, I'm sure there will be one soon. Until then, I'm still waiting....patiently, this time. Later!
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From ANON - funkman on August 16, 2006
I'm back! Now let's see what has changed... (reads story) YOU'RE GOING TO IMPREGNATE MIRAGE!? WTF!? Well... you guys are still kicking ass, and I'm still desperate to know the rest. You guys always seem to keep me coming back for more. Maybe I'm easily entertained, or maybe it's because this story is the oppressor here. Whatever the case, I still want more! Later!
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From ANON - Rand^^ on August 16, 2006
Wow I cant belive that I actualy have time to finally wright a review for this story. That said I would like to thank you for your dedication to your fic. It is an oddity in the fan fic circle. I like the fact that you made the intamicy of Espio and Mirage so wrought with real emotions like fear, dought, and the threat of pain.
I also enjoyed the reality of Mirage and Espio's first time. However I do have one consern, it's that I've noticed that you're focus right now is on your orig. character. I only ark that you don't abandon the orig. cast.

Sincerily, Rand^^ (AKA, Monkey)

Know the Monkey :-) , Fear the monkey O_O , Feel the Monkey ;-)........Feel the Monkey again. ^_^
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From ANON - SO3-luva! on August 15, 2006
That was sweet!!! When are we going to get to the Sonrouge part?
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