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From ANON - BZLF on August 15, 2006
Uhh.. That was.. Different. Yeah. Good to see an update though.
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From ANON - CrazyIvan(notloggedin) on August 13, 2006
Well done, and I apreciate the agknowlegement. To answer you question it is simple, aim higher, the solar system, the galaxy, mabye even the univerese, then again that's probably too much for a singe creature to do, but oh well. I like the way you did this chapter, the uncertain feelings Espio and Mirage expressed keep the reader wondering and interested. However, it did seem slightly rushed, not so rushed as to take away from the story, but more as in rushed into the relationship. However this is your fanfiction, and I'm confident that you will suceed with a wonderful piece of literiture here. This is CrazyIvan, signing off for now...
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From ANON - SynyaTheFox on August 13, 2006
Hmm...finally. Mirage and Espio had to let out their feelings, and they did. They're indeed going to have a deformed child. :) This story is getting really interesting. I can't wait to see what happens next.
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From ANON - Disaster Master on August 13, 2006
Espio kissed Mirage again. "Ouch! Espio you poked my eye out with your horn!" "Oops, sorry about that." They kissed again. "Ouch! Now you poked my other eye out!" Sorry about that but I just keep thinking about this every time Espio and Mirage kiss. You say you're going to impregnate Mirage eh? Yikes. I thought Shadow/Amy was creepy but now that I've seen Espio/Mirage, now that's creepy! chapter 9 score= 3.5 out of 5. And I like what you said about Tails, "...he's still the uber-cute, ultra-intelligent kitsune you all fell in love with. Just gay." Hahaha, that's funny. I'm still pondering about Ashura...and GUN...and Shadow...and Amy...and Sonic...and Eggman...you get the idea.
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From ANON - RAW19 on August 10, 2006
about time those two got together, but midnight? mirage loves him? i thought she didn't understand those emotions. is midnight another person from the ark or just a nickname for shadow? and have you really written another story with an OC/knuckles pairing? i look forward to the next chapter.
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From CrazyIvan on August 09, 2006
Oh dear, I forgot a few things...
First off I have somethings to discuss with the other reviewers, but since this is a review not a forum, I will limit it strictly to the very basic thoughts.

Fisrt off: Subject Emeralds
Personaly I do not care how many or of what type they may or may not appear in.
The chaos emeralds are not "ultimate power" they are very powerful yes, but it is because of their power they are labeled "ultimate" it is only an exageration, not a fact.
Secondly: Original Characters
While I do agree that alot of times OCs are made to be superior to the serires character, the distaseful tone you hinted at forces me to point out the following. Some OC's created to be near perfect or perfect are not bad for the story. Take example Lord Vahakran (Vladranov), although practicly a god, it is absolutley neutral, plus he dresses spiffy.

Vladranov: Leave me out of this you twit, these are you matters, not mine.

Yeah, will do, anyways yes, alot of times people have characters that are uber powerful and just wail on others and other pwnage, there are some authors,(Like me), who have worthwhile characters of such power that I take slight offense to your comment.

Climax/Overall antagonist goal:
The supervillian ruling the earth is very very clithe, but since i assume you already have everything done up, and you obviously are set with your work, I just hope it doesn't subtract from the greatness this fiction could be.

Thank you for your cooperation, this is CrazyIvan, signing off for real now, good luck, and godspeed...

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From CrazyIvan on August 09, 2006
Well, now that I have read ARAAT 1 and 2, plus the first 8 chapters of 3, I can officialy say I am not only interested, but quite satisfied with the way you have done things. Scripture and formating had no detectable errors, and I could also detect no gramatical or spelling errors. The two original characters play out well and have an interesting format. Though, I do begin to believe the use of a,"self serving individual that takes care of themselves only as a guise for a weak self concious and/or uncertain self center" is begining to be a bit overused. However I see no real way around that since nearly all ideas retaining to literiture have already been thought of and used, leaving the only choice to use the same format again with a personal twist.

You have several pairings listed in the title which neither character has even appeared yet, although as it is early in this work I would assume that has already been planned out. It is interesting that you preplanned the sequels, something I have not seen very often, if at all. The homosexual illumination does not bother me, I am neither for it or against it,(No I'm not bi-sexual, I am adequatly based in my heterosexualness that these things do not have any effect on my psyche), so wether or not you have homosexual intercourse is completely youre choice, well, you being the author it was anyways, but you understand what I mean.

I will be looking foreward to further updates on this literiture.
This is CrazyIvan signing off for now, good luck and godspeed...
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From ANON - Adrian Inaba on August 07, 2006
Hi me again *wave's then drop's to my knee's.* please, please, please do a K/T see there pairing is great but a scene between them would just be the cherry ontop really it would. and I'm going to ask every chapter that passes that I dont get to read one. *grinn's widely.*
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From ANON - SynyaTheFox on August 07, 2006
Ah...this is a good chapter. Mirage and Espio...my heart stopped when they kissed. Seriously. It did. And about Tails being gay and all the people complaing? Who gives a shit. It's your story, do with it as you please. I just wonder why people can't understand that. I really can't wait until chapter 9. Until then, I'll be waiting.
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From ANON - pendejo on August 06, 2006
hola! ya regrese! [hello! i have returned!]

ustedes hacen muy muy bien. [you guys do relly really good]

todavia tienen mi attencion. [you guys still have my attention.]

por favor, yo no qiero ver Tails como un joto. [please, i dont want to see Tails as a homo.]

yo se que ustedes dijieron que no van a cambiarlo, pero por favor pueden? [i know you guys said you wouldnt change it, but could you please?]

Tails es uno de mi favoritos, y no qiero verlo asi. [Tails is one of my favorite characters, and i dont want to see him this way.]

ya con que ahgan esto, estoy conforme. por que esta estoria es excellente sin cosas asi. [just as long as you guys do this, im good. because this story is excellent without things like this.]

Adrian Inaba tiene rason, Espio y Mirage van a tener un hijo vien feo! [Adrian Inaba has reason, Espio and Mirage are going to have one ugly child.]

adios! [bye!]
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From ANON - Disaster Master on August 06, 2006
Now the story is making progress. Adrian Inaba is right, Espio and Mirage are going to have one ugly mother fucking kid. -thinks about a mix between a chameleon and a cat- Yikes. chapter 8 score= 3.5 out of 5. A thought came to my mind during the time that Espio kissed Mirage. Wouldn't Espio's 5 inch horn get in the way? Wouldn't it poke Mirage's eye out or something? The time for me to go has come once again, but before I go, -turns to Adrian Inaba- if you fucking flip me off again, I'm going to take a pair of pliers and break your fucking finger off! Oh, and go back to school and learn to spell before you leave another review, you spell like a fucking 8 year old! Oh wait, you probably are an 8 year old! -flips Adrian Inaba off and leaves-
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From HeartOfDarkness on August 05, 2006
Who didn't see this coming. :P
For some reason, when I try to picture what Mirage would look like,
I kind of get a mix of Blaze ands Shadow. I guess it's just me. ^_^
Still, the "Midnight" bugs me. Not sure if this has something to do with what happened on ARK or not.

Also, new picture of Shadow in STH came out this week. And Shadow seems to have a dark clone. (if he wasn't dark enough)
This clone may not be green, but he kind of gives off a vibe like Ashura does in this story. It may just be me though but I thought of Ashura when I saw this. Take a look at the picture's yourself and see what you think?

http://xbox360media.ign.com/xbox360/image/article/723/723440/sonic-the-hedgehog-20060804103600981.jpg

http://xbox360media.ign.com/xbox360/image/article/723/723440/sonic-the-hedgehog-20060804103607200.jpg

Can't wait till next weeks chapter. And sorry just had to re-write some of your fic. But it was for the best and thats what matters. ;)
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From kittynakajima on August 05, 2006
These last two chapters have been especially great. Particularly because you added some depth to Tails and Espio, (even Knuckles).

Seriously, this has to be the one story I've read where they actually added some background information/depth as to why a character like Tails or Knuckles might be homosexual. Usually, you get the basic one-shot lemon in which Tails walks in on one of the others masterbating and wants to join in out of curiosity.

This sounds like something you actually might see a person in real life doing if they're dealing with this issue, which is confiding in someone they trust about the matter. In this case, it's Knuckles, but it works out - a normally introverted type like himself would prefer to listen rather than be the center of attention.

With all that in mind, I find that interesting, as well as a fresh change of pace from the typical Tails x Cream pairing, which probably wouldn't go any further than puppy love given their current ages in the games.

The development between Mirage and Espio has me rooting that they'll soon throw caution to the wind and give in to their passions. Love isn't always a logical thing...

Finally, that snippet about that 'Midnight' character Mirage was dreaming about has me all the more curious. Failed Ultimate perhaps?

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From ANON - H�ous on August 03, 2006
Wow, It's been an awfully long time since I've reviewed this, hasn't it? I've been busy with several things in my life, but I've always been sure to read this when it updates every Saturday, so I'll leave you two with my two cents:

I'm really enjoying the sexual tension between Espio and Mirage. It's clear that they both have an infatuation for each other, the only question is how long it will be before they have sex. I'd guess it'll be the next chapter, or the one after that if you decide to be evil and cause people to wait another week.

As for Tails being gay, I don't exactly like the idea. I'm not homophobic, it's just extremely overdone. If you read a lot of fics on the site you'll notice how many authors like to make Tails gay, so when I see it being done it just comes off as clich�, much like Wile E. Coyote getting an anvil dropped on his head in a Road Runner cartoon.

That's about all I have to say for this week, looking forward to the next chapter.
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From ANON - Adrian Inaba on July 31, 2006
*come's marching in with a rainbow flag then clear's throt.* um hi this is my first time revewing for your fanfic and I have to say when I started reading this I just could not stop till I hit the wall that is the cerint end of your story at the time. it is brilyet but yet you two are a cupll of twisted sister's. *shudder's at the memory of soadow in the lab.* I have one request though, that you contenu with the path that Tails' is now on. I would be veary disapoted if he tured stright now because of certen revew's. *glear's at OiJimmy and Disaster Master.* if it lead's him to a phsacle incounter with Knuckles then so beit I would love to read that. as for the situwasion between Espio and Mirage... there gone have one damn ugly kid that baby ant goen be prity. or atlest the way I immagen it turning out as is.. I don't know how you two would picer it as... well that is my pice I am done so see you the next time I mack a rear review. *turn's to leave but stop's and give's OiJimmy and Disaster Master the finger first before marching out.*
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